2020英语教学资源：2020年高考英语读后续写真题再利用3

2020年高考英语读后续写真题再利用

 

【母题来源三】【2020·新高考全国卷I（山东）】

阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。

The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.

Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.

One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.

“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”

After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”

“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”

For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”

The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn(爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”

注意:

1. 续写词数应为150左右:

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

    When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.

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    With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.

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【答案】

When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. So, they went to the local supermarket together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home, they made a lot of popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn, they went to Bernard’s home. They told Bernard how to sell the popcorn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this family.

With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. He took the popcorn around to the houses and sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then, he wanted to be self-dependent. Therefore, he asked Mrs. Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that, not only did he sell popcorn, but he also added cream and salt to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He did not forget the help of Meredith’s family, and he also did what he could to help those in need.

【解析】本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。

1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意--制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花。

2.根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的。

3.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。

4.根据第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.(当Meredith太太听到John的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意)可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.(一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意)可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。

5.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。

 

【命题意图】 

 ◆选材特点 

读后续写：满分25分。 提供一段350词左右的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写(150词左右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。

◆评分参考 

阅卷时将主要考虑以下内容：

(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度;

(2)内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；

(3)应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;

(4)上下文的连贯性。

◆能力要求

要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，充分调动想象创新思维，大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势，进行充满个性色彩的设计，并用英语进行续写表达。所提供短文词数在350左右，划线词语涉及到名词(词组)、动词(词组)、介词(词组)和形容词等，其中，以名词(词组)为主，在续写中至少要使用5个关键词语，需要注意：在使用关键词语时根据时态和语态的需要，可以改变动词的形式，可以改变名词的单复数，但不要改变关键词语在原文中的含义和词性；多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。

  创造性：即发挥想象力，该题型具有一定的开放性，考生需用自己的语言对故事情节进行内容创造；

  逻辑性：即根据已提供的关键信息，按照可能的合理的方向续写，使文章逻辑结构完整；

  丰富性：即语言能力的充分体现，词汇句法的准确与复杂程度，细节描写的生动性等都将让故事更加立体饱满。

【得分技巧】

 1.通读全文，读懂原文

通读全文首先要解决好五个W和一个H的问题，即理清人物who、地点where、时间when、事件what、原因why及怎样发展how。

2.构思情节，谋篇布局

按照原文中事件发生的逻辑性，构思好情节发展，这个发展须符合情节内在的逻辑。因为这不是写科幻小说，不是写神话，因此应该符合现实发生的真实性。所以这个环节的主要任务是谋篇布局。

布局谋篇最关键应利用好续写部分所给的两段落的首句。这两句话起到很关键的作用，无论从时间的先后、情节的发展都要以这两句话作为内在逻辑关系。在情节的安排中，必须按照叙述的顺序，继续紧密结合原材料中五个W和一个H的逻辑顺序发展下去。第一段和第二段要衔接紧密，相互关联，不能独立存在。

3.理清逻辑，优化语言

第一：侧重点为语言逻辑，词句结构都必须符合当时人狼大战的情景。

第二： 要提炼有思想性、体现价值观和传递正能量的元素（例如珍爱生命，学会合作，学会感恩等）

第三：注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性

第四：要注意连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯。

写作不必追求高大上的词汇，相反，朴实自然、地道、贴切的词语便是好的词语。按照情节的发展进行延续，写作手法上必须以叙为主，描写上以心理、动作描写为重心，场景的描述合乎逻辑地推进。

4.检查，誊写

检查文章的连贯性、逻辑性，规范性。最后誊写要做到字迹工整，清晰美观。

【精准对接】 文章和高考题相似度很高。