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As is vividly shown in the picture,some senior high school students climbed the mountain in order to clean the area where many rubbish lay on the ground.And at last they threw the litter into bin.

   When we see the litter all over here and there,we need to think of the reason why it happened.Firstly,perhaps many people don’t develop a good habit,which throw the litter into bin.Secondly,the influence of a person is great.If one follows the other to throw the litter about,more and more people will do that like them.Last but not least,people still lack in the thought of environment protection.They do not realized the importance of environment.

   As far as I am concerned,the lack of environmetal protecting thought is most serious.It will lead to people throwing litter about,resulting in our environment worse and worse.Environmental protection is a good quality- that’s what makes our world beautiful.So,we need to take actions to get rid of the bad habit.

                                                           

by 杨颖慧

 

 

   One day , My classmates decided to clime the mountain for picking up rubbish to protect the environment, and I took part in this meaningful activity. We set about climing in the morning. Not until about one hour later did we arrive at the top of mountain. It came as a supriae to us that there was too much rubbish on the ground. Then we cleaned away these rubbish by sorting out / classifying these rubbish according to whether they could be recycled or unrecyled.

  What causes this phenominon? Firstly, many people lack the awearness of protecting environment. In other words, they don’t realise the importance of protection. Secondly, people throw rubbish everywhere instead of throwing them into the bin.

  In my opinion, it is proteting the environment that is the important thing for us . It benefits us to have a good mood to clime the mountain because the ground is cleaning.

                                                              by 赖兰芳

One day,some students climbed the mountain to pick up rubish and throw it into bin. Undoubtedly,their deed should be inspired.

However,thess pictures also give s some tips in our daily life.Firstly,we can put forward a problem that why those students cleaned up the attraction in the mountain.The possible answer is that part of tourists go through the view meanwhile littering everywhere.Secondly,the shortcoming in awareness of protecting environment is the main cause contributing this phenomenon.So these tourists turn a blind eye to the bin.Besides,these tourists may hold the view that cleaning rubish is none of their business and it’s cleaners’ duty to do that.

In my opinion,portecting enviromment is everyone’s duty.Firstly,we have only one earth and we all live in the earth.So the earth is our home.Secondly,environment can offer us valuable natural resources.If we pay less attention to environment, we may destroy these resources.What’s more, a cleaning environment can give people a relief. We have not any reasons to destroy the environment.Only by protecting our environment,can we have a bright future

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

One day, My classmates went climbing in the morning. Not until about one hour later did we arrive at the top of mountain. However, it came as a surprise to us that there was too much rubbish on the ground. Instead of marching on, we stopped to clean away these rubbish by sorting out / classifying these rubbish according to whether they could be recycled or unrecycled.( by 赖兰芳)

After that we couldn’t help thinking of what had happened. Firstly, the possible answer is that part of tourists littered everywhere while sightseeing. Secondly, the shortcoming in awareness of protecting environment is the main cause contributing to this phenomenon. They turn a blind eye to the bins. What’s more, they might hold the view that cleaning rubbish is none of their business and it’s cleaners’ duty to do that.

In my opinion, protecting environment is everyone’s duty. For one thing, we have only one earth where we can live. So the earth is our home. For another, environment can provide us with valuable natural resources. Paying less attention to environment, we may destroy these resources. Meanwhile, a cleaning environment can give people a good mood. We have not any reasons to destroy the environment. Only by protecting our environment, can we have a bright future.

(by 叶昌智，杨颖慧)

 

 

 

One day, My classmates went climbing in the morning. Not until about one hour later did we arrive at the top of mountain. However, it came as a surprise to us that there was too much rubbish on the ground. Instead of marching on, we stopped to clean away these rubbish by sorting out / classifying these rubbish according to whether they could be recycled or unrecycled.( by 赖兰芳)

After that we couldn’t help thinking of what had happened. Firstly, the possible answer is that part of tourists littered everywhere while sightseeing. Secondly, the shortcoming in awareness of protecting environment is the main cause contributing to this phenomenon. They turn a blind eye to the bins. What’s more, they might hold the view that cleaning rubbish is none of their business and it’s cleaners’ duty to do that.

In my opinion, protecting environment is everyone’s duty. For one thing, we have only one earth where we can live. So the earth is our home. For another, environment can provide us with valuable natural resources. Paying less attention to environment, we may destroy these resources. Meanwhile, a cleaning environment can give people a good mood. We have not any reasons to destroy the environment. Only by protecting our environment, can we have a bright future.

(by 叶昌智，杨颖慧)

 

 

 

One day, My classmates went climbing in the morning. Not until about one hour later did we arrive at the top of mountain. However, it came as a surprise to us that there was too much rubbish on the ground. Instead of marching on, we stopped to clean away these rubbish by sorting out / classifying these rubbish according to whether they could be recycled or unrecycled.( by 赖兰芳)

After that we couldn’t help thinking of what had happened. Firstly, the possible answer is that part of tourists littered everywhere while sightseeing. Secondly, the shortcoming in awareness of protecting environment is the main cause contributing to this phenomenon. They turn a blind eye to the bins. What’s more, they might hold the view that cleaning rubbish is none of their business and it’s cleaners’ duty to do that.

In my opinion, protecting environment is everyone’s duty. For one thing, we have only one earth where we can live. So the earth is our home. For another, environment can provide us with valuable natural resources. Paying less attention to environment, we may destroy these resources. Meanwhile, a cleaning environment can give people a good mood. We have not any reasons to destroy the environment. Only by protecting our environment, can we have a bright future.

(by 叶昌智，杨颖慧)

 

Shortcomings (Class 2)

1. 记叙部分时态不统一。 记叙部分时态要统一用“过去的时态”

2. 某一部分遗漏，没写：     达辉，宏森，炳钦，思南，旭铭,  毓滨

3.某一部分写的过于简单或离题了：

凯文，锦涛，伟泳，坤明，雅婷，思明：提升看法，智福，泽玲，雁赢，建栋

4. 分析原因与个人看法层次不清：    田祥，银键

 

 

Shortcomings (Class 4)

1.       记叙部分时态不统一。   记叙部分时态要统一用“过去的时态”   丽丽，建东，新峰，月蓉，

2. 某一部分遗漏，没写：     和坤，惶斌，晓恬，华龙，徐烨，桂坡

3.某一部分写的过于简单或离题了：    思捷，杨淇，

4. 分析原因与个人看法层次不清： 蓝薇，

5. 卷面乱，涂改多；字体不美观：    依琳，慧泱，佳义，慧文，鑫磊，15，邦兴，碧盛，林健

6. 篇章结构乱：葆荣